申請(qǐng)論文的寫(xiě)作

Writing the Essay

Your college essay is your best opportunity to distinguish yourself from the many other thousands of Chinese applicants. You have a chance to show your ability to think and write, and also what your character, values, beliefs, and aspirations are. Here is what Harvard’s Dean of Admissions William R. Fitzsimmons is looking for in your essay: the quality of your thinking, your questioning nature, your openness to ideas, and your unique way of expressing your ideas. And if W.R. Fitzsimmons is looking for those qualities in your essay, you can be sure you are on the right essay track with all of the college deans.

大學(xué)申請(qǐng)論文不僅是你從成千上萬(wàn)份中國(guó)申請(qǐng)者中脫穎而出絕佳機(jī)會(huì)，同時(shí)也是展示你個(gè)人真實(shí)想法，寫(xiě)作能力，個(gè)性，價(jià)值觀，信仰和抱負(fù)的平臺(tái)。下面是哈佛大學(xué)招生官William R. Fitzsimmons希望在你的申請(qǐng)論文里能發(fā)現(xiàn)的東西：你的思考能力，你的求知欲，開(kāi)放的思想，還有你表現(xiàn)自己的獨(dú)一無(wú)二的方式。如果William R. Fitzsimmons能在你申請(qǐng)論文里看到你的個(gè)人能力和品質(zhì)，那毫無(wú)疑問(wèn)你在申請(qǐng)論文這關(guān)上已經(jīng)達(dá)到了所有學(xué)校招生官的要求。

Your college essay must be a lot more than listing your test scores and certificates earned since first grade! More than a description of an event or activity, it must be an essay about what you’ve learned from the experience. Don’t even think of writing about the summer and holiday test-prep courses where you have spent your time trying to improve test scores. Once you have the test scores that show you can do the work, the admissions dean is looking for your creative intelligence. Creative intelligence means “the thoughts that you have, your unique way of putting ideas and events together, learning from literature, and your life of the mind that will distinguish you in the selective applicant pool,” advises Harvard’s Fitzsimmons.

你的申請(qǐng)論文不僅僅是你從一年級(jí)到現(xiàn)在的考試成績(jī)和證書(shū)的羅列，以及你曾經(jīng)參加過(guò)的活動(dòng)和項(xiàng)目的簡(jiǎn)單描述，更重要的是你從這些活動(dòng)和經(jīng)歷中學(xué)到了什么。不用去寫(xiě)你為了提高考試成績(jī)，花費(fèi)暑假和周末參加各種考試培訓(xùn)的經(jīng)歷。因?yàn)槟愕某煽?jī)單就已經(jīng)證明了你的學(xué)習(xí)能力，招生官還想要看到的是你的創(chuàng)造性聰明才智。創(chuàng)造性聰明才智指的是你自己的思想，看待問(wèn)題與事物之間聯(lián)系的獨(dú)特方式，還有你從書(shū)本和現(xiàn)實(shí)生活中學(xué)到的東西。而這些都可以讓你從申請(qǐng)者中脫穎而出。

Too many Chinese students write about their test scores, or what they plan to study. Or they write about what they think the admissions officers want to hear: global environment, social service, and giving back to the community. Almost no Chinese students write about their struggle with chemistry, their disappointment in test scores, arguments with their best friend, their love of Chinese history, art, or poetry. Now those are interesting topics for the U.S. college admissions officers to read. No one else in the applicant pool is going to have your point of view on these issues!

大部分的中國(guó)學(xué)生都喜歡寫(xiě)他們的考試成績(jī)和對(duì)未來(lái)的學(xué)習(xí)計(jì)劃，或者是他們認(rèn)為的招生官想要看到的東西，比如：全球環(huán)境，社會(huì)服務(wù)，回報(bào)社區(qū)的活動(dòng)。而幾乎沒(méi)有中國(guó)申請(qǐng)者寫(xiě)他們被化學(xué)課折磨，考試成績(jī)不理想，好朋友之間的爭(zhēng)吵，以及對(duì)中國(guó)歷史、藝術(shù)、詩(shī)歌的熱愛(ài)這樣的話題。而現(xiàn)在這些東西才是美國(guó)招生官更希望在申請(qǐng)論文中讀到的，因?yàn)槠渌暾?qǐng)者不可能會(huì)和你有相同的想法和經(jīng)歷。

What Deans of Admissions Look For

大學(xué)招生官在找什么

When Chinese students apply to an American college, they usually tell how wonderful the college or university is, or what an honor it would be to go there. Think about it, how many essays do you think the deans will read about wanting to study in the USA, wanting to major in engineering or accounting, or wanting to go to a “top ten” university? No matter how unsure you are, try to trust your own idea of what makes you different from your classmates as you write your college essay.

中國(guó)學(xué)生在申請(qǐng)美國(guó)大學(xué)的時(shí)候，他們常常會(huì)寫(xiě)自己申請(qǐng)的學(xué)校多么地了不起，能夠被這所大學(xué)錄取是何等的榮譽(yù)。細(xì)想一下，你認(rèn)為每天招生官要閱讀多少篇像這樣的想要來(lái)美國(guó)繼續(xù)深造，學(xué)習(xí)工程學(xué)和會(huì)計(jì)，或者想要進(jìn)入前十的牛校的申請(qǐng)文章？不管你對(duì)自己的申請(qǐng)多么地沒(méi)有把握，請(qǐng)盡量相信你自己的想法，那些你和邊上其他同學(xué)不同的東西然后把它們寫(xiě)進(jìn)你的大學(xué)申請(qǐng)文章里面。

A Reflection of You

你的寫(xiě)照

The admissions dean wants to know about you, not the people and events in your life. In other words, if you write about your dad, or grandmother, or a bike trip through your province that you took last summer—no matter how dramatic—tell about the person or event in a short paragraph and use the rest of the essay to tell what you learned from the person or experience. How you’ve changed because of it. No matter what the question—who or what has influenced you the most—the task is not to write about the “who” or the “what.” The college admissions dean wants to know what fascinates you about the “who” or the “what.” Your college essay documents how you stand out from your friends and all those other seniors applying to the same college where you are applying.

大學(xué)招生官想要了解的是你，而不是你生命中的人和事。換句話說(shuō)，如果你寫(xiě)的是你和你父母在上個(gè)暑假騎行自行車穿越全省——不管有多么的印象深刻——用很小的篇幅來(lái)介紹里面的人和事，留下更多的地方來(lái)寫(xiě)你從邊上的人和這次經(jīng)歷里學(xué)到的東西。你因?yàn)檫@次經(jīng)歷發(fā)生了什么改變。不管什么問(wèn)題——某人或者某件事對(duì)你影響最大——寫(xiě)作的重點(diǎn)不是里面的人和事。大學(xué)的招生官想要知道的是這些人和事的哪些東西吸引了你。你的大學(xué)申請(qǐng)論文應(yīng)該記錄下你如何從你的朋友和邊上其他所有高年級(jí)申請(qǐng)者中脫穎而出。

Be yourself and go with the essay that has the most “you” in it, not what you think the dean of admissions wants you to say. Don’t let anyone else write your essay for you, because then it will sound like all of the others that they write. Trust yourself… it’s the “you” that the colleges want to know in your essay.

做你自己，讓你的申請(qǐng)文章盡可能地包含你真實(shí)的自己，而不是那些你認(rèn)為的招生官希望看到的東西。不要讓別人幫你寫(xiě)，因?yàn)樗麄儗?xiě)出來(lái)的你和其他人沒(méi)什么區(qū)別。相信你自己，大學(xué)招生官想要從申請(qǐng)論文里了解的是最真實(shí)的“你”。