學(xué)生：王同學(xué)(女)

　　學(xué)生背景：TOEFL 100，GRE 1510，GPA 3.1

　　就讀學(xué)校：北京大學(xué)

　　申請(qǐng)專(zhuān)業(yè)：M-公共衛(wèi)生、M-公共政策

　　錄取院校：哈佛大學(xué)，耶魯大學(xué)

　　選校：Harvard、Yale、UPenn、Columbia、U of Chicago、UCLA、Imperial College London、UCL、Oxford、Cambridge

　　優(yōu)勢(shì)及劣勢(shì)分析

　　王同學(xué)本科就讀于北京大學(xué)，綜合素質(zhì)相當(dāng)不錯(cuò)，實(shí)習(xí)工作經(jīng)歷也很豐富。學(xué)生曾在清華衛(wèi)生與發(fā)展研究中心、衛(wèi)生部醫(yī)療改革辦公室等地方工作，同時(shí)也做過(guò)很多研究，發(fā)表過(guò)多篇論文。劣勢(shì)，GPA很一般。

　　推薦人選擇及文書(shū)創(chuàng)作

　　推薦人1：Prof. Liu. 他是Harvard School of Public Health China Initiative的Director。由于推薦人曾指導(dǎo)申請(qǐng)人做過(guò)一些研究項(xiàng)目，在這封推薦信中筆者重點(diǎn)強(qiáng)調(diào)申請(qǐng)人扎實(shí)的專(zhuān)業(yè)知識(shí)、突出的研究能力、以及綜合素質(zhì)。

　　精彩句子：1. She is a multi-talented student, not only with a strong academic record, but also a shining star on and off campus through her various social and charitable activities, including earth quake disaster relief work in Sichuan province and volunteer work for the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games.

　　2. In addition, she has attended training programs and forums for top government officials and high-level executives, during which she was enlightened by the most authoritative Chinese experts and scholars in the field of public health and therefore gained a profound understanding of this field.

　　3. Currently working as a researcher as well as translator, XX, with the Harvard Master student, has carried out emergency preparedness pilot projects in communities, and interviewed some renowned domestic experts and professors of School of Public Policy and Management, Tsinghua University and School of Government, Peking University, officer of the Emergency Office of the Ministry of Health, and the Vice-chairman of Red Cross Society of China.

　　推薦人2：學(xué)生的論文指導(dǎo)老師，指導(dǎo)學(xué)生的畢業(yè)論文Analysis on the Use of Essential Drugs in Certain Regions in China。這封推薦信筆者強(qiáng)調(diào)了學(xué)生的學(xué)術(shù)能力、愛(ài)好鉆研、開(kāi)展調(diào)查以及分析能力等。

　　精彩句子：1. In conducting the research into the essential drugs in China, she did not directly employ the methodologies provided by the World Health Organization, but discussed with me after reading over the Handbook of Methodology, believing that this study improved on the standard methodology to bring it into accordance with China’s national conditions, so as to use more reasonable methodology to research on the prices, availability and affordability of medicines in China.

　　2. XX worked in my lab as a lead research assistant, sort of head of the research assistants, because she demonstrated her outstanding managerial and communication skills. She is a very pleasant person to work with.

　　推薦人3：衛(wèi)生部的黨組書(shū)記。這封推薦信充分肯定了申請(qǐng)人的工作能力、對(duì)公共衛(wèi)生領(lǐng)域的執(zhí)著、很強(qiáng)的自學(xué)能力，以及對(duì)申請(qǐng)人給予的厚望。

　　精彩句子：1. As the Secretary of Party Leadership Group of Ministry of Health, I feel privileged to write this letter of recommendation for Miss Wang XX, a promising young lady as well as a potential professional in the field of public health, for acceptance into the Master’s program in Public Health in your esteemed University.

　　2. During her internship, she mainly undertook the reform of public hospital system and at that time, it happened to the “trial implementation of scheduling an appointment with a doctor”. As her superior, I was deeply impressed with her adaptability, her learning capacity and her strong sense of responsibility.

　　在王同學(xué)準(zhǔn)備Personal Statement之前，IDP項(xiàng)目辦公室顧問(wèn)陪同學(xué)生仔細(xì)閱讀了提供的中文素材，包括學(xué)生發(fā)表的論文，加起來(lái)一共有30多頁(yè)?？上攵@是一個(gè)多么大的工程量。在寫(xiě)作PS時(shí)，王同學(xué)重點(diǎn)強(qiáng)調(diào)了申請(qǐng)人扎實(shí)的學(xué)術(shù)知識(shí)、對(duì)公共衛(wèi)生領(lǐng)域的熱情、突出的實(shí)際能力以及對(duì)職業(yè)的展望。

　　整體看來(lái)，Admissions Officer在閱讀完王同學(xué)的簡(jiǎn)歷、推薦信以及PS后，得出結(jié)論：王同學(xué)是一個(gè)學(xué)習(xí)成績(jī)優(yōu)秀、科研經(jīng)歷豐富、開(kāi)朗、樂(lè)觀、有思想、有潛力的青年。

　　希望以上的例子可以啟發(fā)、幫助申請(qǐng)人認(rèn)識(shí)到合理安排申請(qǐng)材料的重要性。相信經(jīng)過(guò)斟酌思索，你構(gòu)思和撰寫(xiě)的申請(qǐng)文書(shū)也能為你插上翅膀，助你飛得更高、更遠(yuǎn)，飛向你的Dream School!